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Geography of Avatar (2015), Source

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  1. Hi SV,

    For starters, I think that your storybook looks absolutely AMAZING! The layout is very clear and easy to navigate and the picture for the Introduction is breathtaking! Everything looks great so far :)

    After reading your introduction, I am very eager to start reading your stories whenever they get published! You are an amazing writer with a nice flow. You really know how to capture your readers!

    I am not going to lie, when I read Avatar in the title and saw the picture for the introduction, I thought it was going to be about the blue Avatars, not the Nickelodeon cartoon. But, I think that this is going to be just as good, if not better, than what I expected! Again, your writing is just so captivating. I am really looking forward to your stories and reading about the lost adventures/tales of the Avatar, Aang!

    -Libby Helm

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    1. Hello SV, I think your story book layout is off to a great start. I really enjoy the layout and designs you have going and think that the picture you have used on the header is beautiful and a place I would like to visit oneday. I did not have any prior knowledge about the Avatar or that there was even an avatar cycle. Avatar Aang sounds like he is going to be an intriguing character that keeps the reader engaged from start to finish. The travels you talk about in the introduction sound exciting. Are you going to be doing a different page for each seperate place he goes? I am super interested to come back and read your story book once it has been completed. I think you are doing a great job and going to have an awesome page when it is all completed.

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  2. Hey, SV!

    I know others have mentioned it, but I really, really enjoyed the design of your blog! I noticed it before I actually read the title of your blog, and it fits really well with your theme and introduction! I also think you did an amazing job on the introduction. The detail you included in describing the story to someone who has potentially not been exposed to Avatar was really keen, with great attention to the small details. I can tell that when you begin to write and add more stories to your blog that they will also follow this pattern of detail, and I really look forward to it. I also really enjoyed your syntax, which went hand-in-hand with your descriptors throughout your introduction. Really good job! I think you have inspired my to write with a lot more detail and include a lot more original content in my own pieces. So, thanks!

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  3. Hi there SV!
    You have such a nicely designed layout for this story. It is clean and serene to start out with and makes your posts very easy to read. I am excited for this and to see how you develop your own version of Aang. As a person who recently binged the series again I am super excited to keep up with your blog and see exactly where you take it. I do wonder, are you going to make it more of a solo journey through the cycle or will you be introducing some of the characters from the show into your own adaptation? I wonder if maybe each page that you do is a new character he encounters or each page is the mastery of a new element using East Asian stories. I think that you have all the nations at your fingertips right now and I am excited to come back to your blog!

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    1. Hello SV!
      I am back to read your next story! Already you have good background knowdlge of Wan Shi Tong and helps to set the stage for the reader and why the spirit is the way he is. I think that you could add in how exactly Aang found the library or ease into it because the introductions of Aang and Wan Shi Tongs seem to start abruptly. You did very good at capturing the childlike manner and newness of being the Avatar in Aang with how he presents himself and his dialogue. I found one small bit where Aang says "we" when talking to Wan Shi Tong about the Fire Nation and I was not sure if that was intentional as you may introduce other characters that Aang is in cahoots with or if "we" was the rest of the world. If Aang is alone in this fight at that moment it may be less confusing to say "I" instead. Overall very well written and I am excited for the next "episode" and who you highlight there!

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  4. Hey SV! Let me just start with saying I nerded out a bit when I saw that your story book was based on Avatar the Last Airbender... I loved that show growing up!! The picture you used in the home screen definitely brought back memories and feelings of nostalgia. The website is very easy to navigate and user-friendly. Reading your introduction, I am really excited to read your stories following Aang. I wonder are you going to introduce all the main characters from the show? Or only some of them? (Please include an Uncle Iroh haha). I noticed your use of detail in your introduction, and I hope you carry that same level over into your stories. I also wonder how you are going to set up your stories. Do you think you will do like a fire, water, air chapters like in the show? Great job so far, I can't wait to see where this goes!

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  5. Hi SV! I love the avatar the last airbender and I think that you have an amazing storyboard and I am very excited to see where you take this. I like that you talked a lot about the mythical animals that appeared in the shows and comics because that was always one of my favorite parts about watching the show. I think that look at the mythology from the show and looking at the myths that they were derived from might even increase the appreciation of the show. I really can't wait to see where this story goes and I will defiantly come back to see where you take it. It has been really cool to see the reception that ATLA has had since coming back out on netflix as well as seeing that more people have been able to see Kora again or for the first time. I think that you did an excellent job and I am very excited to see where you take this.

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  6. Hello, I really appreciated your detailed introduction. I really enjoyed how you explained the background information of the Avatar culture so that when people read the stories they have a better understanding. The cliff hanger was also very intriguing and makes me want to read more! I really enjoyed your story and felt as if it was part of the actual show. I have not watched the whole show through but know enough about it and I would believe that this actually happened in the show. Although, I have no idea what the original story was and how the two stories relate. A suggestion I would make is to just include a brief summary of the original story in the author’s note. This will give me an idea of how you have really made this into your own. Overall, very good job!

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  7. Hi there!
    I like the design of your storybook webpage; the colors are simple and muted and highlights the images you’ve chosen. The banner image on the introduction page looks like an incredible place. The introduction is short and easy to understand. I appreciate that you provide some context about Avatars and the Avatar cycle. This would be helpful for people who have not seen the show, too. The last sentence in the introduction is a great cliffhanger, for sure. Are the stories in your storybook a continuation of each event or are they separate stories regarding Aang’s travels as he tries to preserve peace and balance? The story of “Wan Shi Tong’s Library” is written very well; there’s a good balance of descriptive narration and dialogue. I like how you highlighted Wan Shi Tong as a main character and gave some background information on him. Will the rest of your stories of Aang’s encounters follow the same approach? I’m interested in reading the rest of your storybook; great work!

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